The following link is connected to the draft of my essay. The draft is not completely finished, but includes the bulk of my work. I will soon be adding in the conclusion aside from some revision. The conclusion should tie everything together.
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I believe that I have effectively elaborated on the first two main points of my essay. There will, of course, be a need for revision, but I think I have those first two points well defined. I just need to add in a conclusion that ties everything together and maybe make sure that my thoughts within the essay in the form of paragraphs flow one into the other.
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Sara,
ReplyDeleteLooks like you have done alot of great work so far on your draft. I like how you have included your sources at the end of the document as well.
In your introduction paragraph I like how you have used a quote from the article we discussed in class. You have addressed well the meaning of authorship, from which we talked about in class.
I like how you have addressed the quick accessibility of the interent and how it plays a role on authorship. I think this was an important point to address in your paper.
I think all you really need now is a conclusion paragraph summarizing what you have talked about it the paper so far. Great Start!
Sara: Your essay is very well written! I think I understand the two main points that you are focusing on thus far. However, I think it might be helpful to readers if you clarify your main content areas in a sentence in the first paragraph. Overall, I think it will be a great essay!
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